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Sonnet: Finally See

Finally See

In knowledge of my lonely heart’s despair,
I stand in the cold darkness so alone.
Depending only on your empty glare,
I make myself so utterly unknown.

The chances of your recognition slim,
I still stand, suff’ring like I always do.
You’ll never see me; I am in the dim.
My meaningful stares are unseen by you.

So see without you seeing me for me.
Oh be without me being in your life.
To see but not be seen as worth by thee,
What torture! I would rather take a knife.

But, finally, when you come to know me,
You, nor I, will regret what we both see.

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It was for a school assignment so it really was forced. So a quick overview of sonnets (FYI). The way I had to write in is "Shakespearian" (Elizabethan): 3 quatrains and 1 couplet = 14 lines total.It's an abab, cdcd, efef, gg rhyming scheme. No big deal right? What made it even harder for me is that it had to be in iambic pentameter: unstressed/stressed.

I'm not exactly proud or ashamed of this one because it was forced. I had to write it first without considering iambic pentameter. In other words, I manipulated and changed what I actually wanted to say to fit that specific form.

Yea I woke up at 4 am in my bed thinking "OH SHIT, laying in bed for a MINUTE was a BAD idea" lol.

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