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Mz YuMMi KiMChi
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one of my poems.. am i in the right topic??

anyhoo.. i posted this on kmusics too.. i was just blowing off steam about my ex.. tsk.. am i im the right topic area?

stop underestimating my capabilities
i cant think or work because of my agony
how many times will i bring myself into this
ever since u cursed me with ur sickening promise
people see you for what you may appear
even though your not, they take off what they hear
its unbelievable how you've changed dramaticly
i was hooked on you, even brought to chemistry
but all the things were all full of lies
and i acted stupid wondering why
when it was all your problem and none of mine
and reminiscing for you was just wasting my time
i cant believe what you put me through
just to get my feelings shot out to you
you wouldin't listen thinking you were the perfect bf
but let me break it to you... im still me whether the less
proportional i felt just being together
not even good enough no matter how i try whether
it was to change all of my self just for your satisfaction
i mean you cant accept me because of doubt's first reaction
you brought me joy that lasted temporarily
but when i tried to cry, comfort was heard from you rarely
how can you treat me like this and act like nothing
just forget our song and what we use to sing
never heard my side of the story and t0ok accusations
i dont believe im takin my words to involve my relations
just dont even think can bring n my life an impact
because from what you think is true.. go get your facts
dont need to hide from me all of these moments
now that i think about it, being with you was regrets
i thought that us being together, you had the potiential
but our love had a curve and turned off sucessful
the heart that was forming was a measly little mold
so forget what we had and move on your road

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umm maybe this would go better in Creative writing.

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Moving to CW.

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