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Mouko
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Poem - Untitled

I just wrote this on asianxo, its on their "creative" forum aka thinking outside of the box. it was a word/poetry game someone made up where you try to write a poem using words that the person before you gives and of course, after you finish your poem you list a few words for the next person to use. I really like this idea.

anyways, the words I were given are in bold. I know that there are a lot of people that take religion or religious related things seriously, but this is my personal opinion on the subject, if you are offended by it, I'm sorry that you are, but I won't apologize if you disagree.

Forgive them
father
for they have sinned
As these herders lead the sheep to get shaved and skinned
assuming it's to save their souls from damnation and bring them to enternal bliss I ponder this
existence
in a somewhat pleasant bucolic scene
in my night scenes when I
stay in my subconcious during my daydreams
My mind gets filled
with
vivid fantasies that it cannot handle
causing mental congestion and a paroxysm of coughing
Both ears still ring long after I pick up the words the choir sings
I've mistaken it as a calling!
Medicine for aching instability trying to
reach the end of a narrow tunnel
following a bright sight that is nothing more than a fading candle light
vigils
burning endlessly in ritual devotion to manmade faceless gods
because they are chary of not getting involved
So they pass around the collection plate under watchful eyes that blinks when their own rules don't apply
they practice spritual incest
twists and distress public interest while they continue to molest
hungry souls
suck on a Virgins' breast looking for nourishment
not realizing that its empty
but they still flock in search of growing mentally healthy.

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