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LiLboy
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small poem~

to walk into the blinding ilght
where nothing i can see
instead of the dark of night
where none can see of me

to fall in silence
to drown without a word
to cry a million tears
without ever being heard

can you hear these cries of pain
that lay unheard in the soul of mine
the hands are fast approaching
and tearing away at time

can you see these tears i shed
longing for an end
they burn into my heart
and leaves my soul unread

*escape...*

does anyone get what i wrote?...or am i out there hanging on a limb?

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MellowYellow
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it's a nice poem

"can you see these tears i shed
longing for an end"

that makes the poem sound suicidal.... and plus those two verses before that...

sounds like a sort of.... depressing poem... of someone who isn't understood, doesn't understand, and wishes to... "escape" their life.....


just my interpretation -_-

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LiLboy
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haha naw~ im not suicidal~

sometimes it seems no one understands and i just wanna forget about it all~

juss feel really trapped sometimes

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haha naw~ im not suicidal~

sometimes it seems no one understands and i just wanna forget about it all~

juss feel really trapped sometimes



oh oops..... i didn't mean that you were suicidal...i was saying... that just the attitude of specific parts of the poem seem like they would come from someone who lost all meaning in life


goooooooood poem though... now that i review it

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LiL_HyeSung
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whatta good poem!
whats the poem abt...?
i mean.....why did u write it? was there a particular reason? love? family?

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haha hmm...i guess i felt really trapped emotionally
no one there to hear my way out
but its getting better
sometimes no matter how loud you yell - no one can hear your pain
know the feelin?

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