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J-DraGoNz
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my poem...

aiight, im a really bad poet, and my poems suck, atleast in my opinion, and suddenly the international library of poetry wants to publish it...aint dat some shit.

here it iz...rate itz suckiness

You Will Never Know

You will never know the way that i feel,
My love for you , will never be revealed,

You can never know the pain that i feel,
When you're with another guy, i just wanna die,

You will never know about my hurt inside,
When i see you cry, i wanna be by your side,

You can never know my love for you girl,
You alone are my whole world,

You will never know how lonely i feel,
Without you, nothing is ever real,

You can never know how foolish it would be,
To think you could ever love me,

You will never know.



[Edit]Who the hell would wanna publish this? x.x[/Edit]

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i cant vote for some reason buh i like ur poems!

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J-DraGoNz
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quote:
Originally posted by junjinluber33
i cant vote for some reason buh i like ur poems!


haha ok cathy...thanks =P

x.x man, ya'll need some critisism in here...ya'll TOO nice....its...like...dunno...haha

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very nice..but it think if you put a bit more metaphors and detail in to your subject..i think it would sound alot better..its already good as it.nice job

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it cud be a song good stuff

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