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tell me what u guys think of this poem

[in my dreams]
did i tell u about this girl?
thinkin bout her makes my mind swirl.
every nite i try to sleep, but
i can't, i ask myself, wat
i can do to get her, so
i dream on and on for God to show,
the way to her heart.
I'd listen to him if i were smart.
one nite, we were holding hands,
together we walked through different lands.
if felt so real, but yet it seems,
i can only meet her in my dreams.

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"Love is like a friendship caught on fire. In the beginning a flame, very pretty, often hot and fierce, but still only light and flickering. As love grows older, our hearts mature and our love becomes as coals, deep-burning and unquenchable. " - Bruce Lee

ooooooooo~ *applauds* dats sooo gewd!!!

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Originally posted by sArAnGhAeYo012
ooooooooo~ *applauds* dats sooo gewd!!!

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"Love is like a friendship caught on fire. In the beginning a flame, very pretty, often hot and fierce, but still only light and flickering. As love grows older, our hearts mature and our love becomes as coals, deep-burning and unquenchable. " - Bruce Lee

hmmm

not bad..keep writing, u will progress as u write more..aint too shabby tho' ^_^

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Recongizable

thnx!!!!!

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"Love is like a friendship caught on fire. In the beginning a flame, very pretty, often hot and fierce, but still only light and flickering. As love grows older, our hearts mature and our love becomes as coals, deep-burning and unquenchable. " - Bruce Lee

Wow very nice.. I love the last part AJ!
one nite, we were holding hands,
together we walked through different lands.
if felt so real, but yet it seems,
i can only meet her in my dreams.

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I know you better than you think I do-don't
worry dear, this is why I fell in love with you.
The man in the looking glass, is looking back
at you at last. You can't hide from the truth
because the truth is all there is.
And the truth hurts because the truth is all there is.
I realized some time ago, that I would have to let you go...
- Handsome Boy Modeling School
*d-30

thnx samira

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"Love is like a friendship caught on fire. In the beginning a flame, very pretty, often hot and fierce, but still only light and flickering. As love grows older, our hearts mature and our love becomes as coals, deep-burning and unquenchable. " - Bruce Lee

i like the last part it's nice :) good job keep writin more i enjoy it the most because i was short :)

hey, das good...keep em comin

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