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i'm ready

i'm ready

ayo....
i'm ready for all you critics out there who talk shit an diss me/
i'm just new to this game an all i want is for you to see/
i aint gonna take this garbage from people who dont know nuttin/
just cause you hear from me once dont mean u gotta be cuttin/
i aint a one hit wonder from some company creation/
but all you're doing is making me get skill inflation/
so thankyou for making me work harder/
even though i might be a late starter/
all you're doing is building up uneeded anger in me myself/
even thy brethren put downs thyself/
laughing at me when i sing or rap for fun/
but ima show them, show them cause in front of them i had sung/
everybody judges me from my appearance an not my skills/
dissing you in a freestyle i dont think i'll need no fills/
man, all this hate will be transfered into words and spit at you/
and then laughing at me is all they ever do/
walk down the corridor an see people smirk an do "hiphop actions"/
wanting to see my reaction and then start bagging/
i say hardcore an they just laugh, think its still about sex, they so lagging/
my knuckles so white getting ready to burst/
so much, i wanna release the anger, i wanna destruct and curse/
i walk to class, i'm a sudden celebrity, people wanting me to freestyle and diss/
so much i wanna connect with my fist and release power from my wrist/
i'm just a normal person with normal emcee skills with a normal mouth/
just cause i rap, i'm the next eminem or dr.dre/
i'm so embarrased i dont know what to say/
i'm just an emcee from the east so you should watch more tv and go out more/
in my mind, i had released my anger and everything so red and raw/
i'm might be the only emcee at school but not in the world/
you bunch of pooftas stop talking, my blood is starting to curl/
go get a life you motherfuckers and open your eyes/
dont let this get outta hand, words are starting to fly/
some people think after they watch 8 mile they some immediate snoop dogg/
espescially the wog who thinks he so gangster when he nuttin but a wog/
you must be good, u spit a 2 sentence rhyme that reeked of.....you/
somthing like "kilam is a choke artist and not phat, your even worst than my cat"/
mate, you cant rap, and in my eyes u nuttin but a lyrically wacked rat/
i'm ready for all you haters and rap dissers/
not all of your put downs and criticisms are misses/
most of them hit, they bruise and cut me and make me bleed/
but i build on them, i'm now bigger and better, what you saw and fed was a seed/
it now is now strong, powerful and lyrically embedded to counter any attack/
i wasnt ready back then, i now know what i lacked/
and to "dj un-original name pheonix", rap's gonna take you and your turntable down/
i'm thinking of how to "scratch" you and your name off the score board, clown/
the score right now is "techno- nil, rap-..." damn man, i lost count, u gone/
i'm giving you, your chance to admit you're wrong/
if it came down to it, i would spit you down when you just scratching/
i bet i could beat box all the beats you play/
i could write rhymes all day/
cause some people just dont get it, they just keep on staring/
you fools, you think the tip of the ice berg is nearing/
but i've already reached it, thats why i'm dissing all in my school/
but i'll bide my time, keep to the school rules/
you aint ready for the real kilam yet/
if i had cloned myself and battled there would be explosions/
the real me would have been released and wreaked havoc and let my rhymes cause brain erosions/
i'm ready........//

took me less than half an hour......a bit wack in some bits.....just needed to release some anger........

story: my school is a christian school. every thursday we have chapel which is where we have praise and worship and stuff....
well, each year level does one each year.
its was our, year 9's turn.
and the team and whatever wanted me to rap...
so i wrote up a christian one and rapped it at chapel.
then after that, people everywhere are goin: "yo yo yo"
doing rap hand movements and stuff....
i've been called "homie", "gangster" an stuff like that like "homegrown" all year just because i low ride. and i'm like what tha heck?!
i say hardcore in class and everyone giggles and think its still jus about sex......
how stupid can people get?!
them fools......

so yeh. thats my story for this rap.....
P.S i aint no homie or gangster

haha i was like...i dont get where this is going until after i read ur explaination.

man. shit was long lol. pretty good.

Rhyme scheme was kinda off at some parts...some lines didnt really make sense. i like the topic of the first few bars...but like your subject changes so dramatically...even though its somewhat related IF you know the story...so it seems like you digress. some nice lines here n there. not bad.

if you spit this to a beat

"but i'll bide my time, keep to the school rules/
you aint ready for the real kilam yet/
if i had cloned myself and battled there would be explosions/
the real me would have been released and wreaked havoc and let my rhymes cause brain erosions/"

dude...that last line...is SOOO MUCH LONGER then the 2nd one. that would be like impossible. you put too many words in a line.

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thx man...
its peeps like YOU that really builds me up.....not them fags at skoo.....
i'm like 'bout to bash them lil' shits......

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Originally posted by chung_freestyle
thx man...
its peeps like YOU that really builds me up.....not them fags at skoo.....
i'm like 'bout to bash them lil' shits......

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sick man.....