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Posted by MoOnLigHt on 07-18-2002 03:56 PM:

AnoTher poEm....

wrote this onE after my bf broke up with me...T.T...hope you enjoy~


Lost and found:

"I love you" he said,
on the first day they met,
confused she looked,
on his smile she was hooked

Regrets soon came,Lies he told,
As time went by,the feelings cold

Ignored she felt, her mind so torn,
Late at night, alone she mourned

Excuses he gave, mistakes he made,
more and more, the truth would fade

"i loved you" he lied,
hurt she sighed,
sincerity had died,
no place to hide

Lies revealed
Truth disappeared,
Falsehood leered
Love was smeared

Betrayed she felt, confused her love,
Determined she was, not to speak of

Relieved he was, new love he found
He did not hear the aching sound,

Found was he, lost was she,
This was today and the girl was me

Posted by LiLboy on 07-18-2002 05:49 PM:

nice poemm~
feel betta moonlight ^^
guyz who don't stick by u . don't deserve u
but i feel ur pain....aigoness

SmiLe ^^

if all the world was to wither and die
all i'd wish it to die by ur side
hand in hand - would i open my eyes
together foreva in heaven - foreva u bah mah sides
-lilboy

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Posted by Ladi Jay on 07-19-2002 04:34 PM:

Re: AnoTher poEm....

quote:
Originally posted by MoOnLigHt

Lies revealed
Truth disappeared,
Falsehood leered
Love was smeared


:omg: I love that line... you are so good at writing poems... how old are you??? You are seriously good... no joke... I wish I could rhyme like that...

Posted by MoOnLigHt on 07-19-2002 04:49 PM:

ThanX

haha.......thanx guys....im over it now....lol.....by the way, racer ladi moon....im sixteen....thanx for da compliment ^^

Posted by LiLboy on 07-19-2002 05:54 PM:

hey im 16 toO~

juss droppin by to say i love ur writingg ^^

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Posted by MoOnLigHt on 07-19-2002 06:00 PM:

lol nice to meet you lilboy.......hehe......my names EunBin (erin)
lol........im glad you enjoy my writings hehe......thanx....more to come soon

Posted by MellowYellow on 07-19-2002 08:51 PM:

Re: AnoTher poEm....

quote:
Originally posted by MoOnLigHt
Lies revealed
Truth disappeared,
Falsehood leered
Love was smeared

Found was he, lost was she,
This was today and the girl was me


i like those 2 stanzas (???) the best.
you're only 16? lol me too... but i'm a horrible writer... i'm a great reader tho heh heh

aww that's so sad.. eww that guy was a jerk.. hope you're doing better...

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Posted by WhiteLee on 07-21-2002 11:25 PM:

Niiiiice work!
emotion and all, wow.

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